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Love is Suicide by ~JadedOptimist:iconJadedOptimist:

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"love" is a game you play,
cat-chase-mouse and come in for the kill
but every playful swipe of the claws cuts deep
and the blood pours out faster than the "love"
can't you see I don't want to play anymore?

"love" is the seasons,
spring-forward, summer together, fall into bed
but you can't forget there is another season
for it is always winter in your heart
and the coldness cuts deeper than the warmth can burn

"love" is life, or so you say
but every second the end creeps nearer
because you hurt me, you slay me
and eventually I'll die for this so-called "love"
"love is suicide," disguised as feeling
©2004-2009 ~JadedOptimist
:iconjadedoptimist:

Author's Comments

I wrote this to go with [link]
photo belongs to ~justinaerni and I owe him for letting me use it at a preview

this poem is dedicated to Justin, not just for inspiring me, but for being so awesome (and so effing adorable).

[EDIT: did away with the "death clock" line. you can see the original as a comment on Justin's photo.]

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:iconalon2:
~Alon2 Dec 10, 2004, 7:11:49 AM
this is well trodden territory, but you have some nice metaphors here. Except for the 'death clock'. I didn't like that line at all.
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~phox Dec 10, 2004, 10:19:35 AM
The 'death clock' could be revised, it struck me as a little blunt... Maybe try but every second the end ticks near .

Or something like that. ;)

It's beautiful though... I can feel the pain in this, so pure. :hug:

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Nothing worth having ever comes easy...
:iconjadedoptimist:
~JadedOptimist Dec 10, 2004, 12:56:51 PM
I think I might do that now.

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:invisible: I wish I was as invisible as you make me feel... :invisible:
:iconjadedoptimist:
~JadedOptimist Dec 10, 2004, 12:59:36 PM
thank you. :blush: I did away with the "death clock"

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:invisible: I wish I was as invisible as you make me feel... :invisible:
:iconphox:
~phox Dec 10, 2004, 1:04:37 PM
Much better. :)

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Nothing worth having ever comes easy...
:iconjadedoptimist:
~JadedOptimist Dec 10, 2004, 1:10:53 PM
thank you. I like it better too.

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:invisible: I wish I was as invisible as you make me feel... :invisible:
:iconalon2:
~Alon2 Dec 10, 2004, 1:15:41 PM
awesome! Thanks for the watch, as well!
:iconjadedoptimist:
~JadedOptimist Dec 10, 2004, 1:35:43 PM
you're an awesome poet.

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:invisible: I wish I was as invisible as you make me feel... :invisible:
:iconjustinaerni:
~justinaerni Dec 10, 2004, 10:22:51 PM
Beautiful job. I cant say think you enough for doing such a justice to my piece. :hug:
I "love" you so much for this. Of course when i say love Im not talking about the suicide as described in the poem you wrote.:):):)

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